Jamie, I think your voice is starting to get there. Based on your facial expression you look like your trying to hard. Your volume is a bit lower and you almost sound like your right at falsetto level.
I use to always go from falsetto then bring it down, which helped at the start but I found I was always sounding like I was talking in falsetto when doing earlier recordings - but I found when I practice now I can just go into the range I want with out falsetto. Try that, I also do this one practice technique I learn from someone video were you count to practice your pitch. So 1 lower pitchs, 2 higher, 3 lower pitch ect.
Frostice, I think your voice sounds great, but not knowing your language and how women of your culture speak like. Have you ever did any recordings in English?