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Title: Particle Tracks
Post by: MarinaM on March 07, 2011, 11:49:59 AM
Post by: MarinaM on March 07, 2011, 11:49:59 AM
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Title: Re: Particle Tracks
Post by: andro on March 12, 2011, 06:30:21 PM
Post by: andro on March 12, 2011, 06:30:21 PM
I love your work :)
Ashes has such imagery and great word use
i relate to young, beautifully succinct
either is just wonderfully romantic and heart felt
your freestyle electromagnetic has a great line " I'm magnetic, but I'm facing the wrong direction."
ty for the poems and freewrite :)
Ashes has such imagery and great word use
i relate to young, beautifully succinct
either is just wonderfully romantic and heart felt
your freestyle electromagnetic has a great line " I'm magnetic, but I'm facing the wrong direction."
ty for the poems and freewrite :)
Title: Re: Particle Tracks
Post by: MarinaM on March 12, 2011, 06:48:32 PM
Post by: MarinaM on March 12, 2011, 06:48:32 PM
Thank you and you're welcome. ;D
Ashes took countless revisions and 14 years to form into that, it's my "living" masterpiece. I honestly don't think it will ever be done. Ether was born from unrequited love, and > young is a child of dysphoria.
I'm only a part time poet, and the trick for me has been to write even when inspiration isn't striking.
Ashes took countless revisions and 14 years to form into that, it's my "living" masterpiece. I honestly don't think it will ever be done. Ether was born from unrequited love, and > young is a child of dysphoria.
I'm only a part time poet, and the trick for me has been to write even when inspiration isn't striking.
Title: Re: Particle Tracks
Post by: Susan Baum on March 12, 2011, 09:15:26 PM
Post by: Susan Baum on March 12, 2011, 09:15:26 PM
Thank you, Awsome Emma
Simply put, "Ashes" tore me apart (I can not read it without getting at least misty-eyed), "Young" and "Ether" reinforced my dismal and lonely outlook (I am ...old...), your sentinel in "I do care" brought me a bit of sorely needed peace and relief.
Hugs
:icon_hug:
Susan
Quote from: EmmaM on March 12, 2011, 06:48:32 PMPart time or otherwise, your poetry has spoken to me with Clear, Wonderful images...
I'm only a part time poet, and the trick for me has been to write even when inspiration isn't striking.
Simply put, "Ashes" tore me apart (I can not read it without getting at least misty-eyed), "Young" and "Ether" reinforced my dismal and lonely outlook (I am ...old...), your sentinel in "I do care" brought me a bit of sorely needed peace and relief.
Hugs
:icon_hug:
Susan
Title: Re: Particle Tracks
Post by: MarinaM on March 13, 2011, 01:31:31 AM
Post by: MarinaM on March 13, 2011, 01:31:31 AM
Thanks Susan.
Ashes is supposed to rip you to shreds, that's the kind of poem it is. I let a person who frequents a poetry workshop read it and she cried right in front of me, then she asked if I was published; I told her I did not want to make money off of it. I always read it slowly, but I'm looking at it now and I realize my punctuation is off.
"I do care..." has no punctuation and the title is part of the poem itself, and so is the last line: "my friend." It's meant to be read fast- a person usually finds the right meter after a concerted go. It's meant to be an exhibition of everything that can be packed into that simple four word phrase: I do care, my friend.
These, however, are old. I haven't written anything substantial in about a year...
Thanks for your kind words :)
Ashes is supposed to rip you to shreds, that's the kind of poem it is. I let a person who frequents a poetry workshop read it and she cried right in front of me, then she asked if I was published; I told her I did not want to make money off of it. I always read it slowly, but I'm looking at it now and I realize my punctuation is off.
"I do care..." has no punctuation and the title is part of the poem itself, and so is the last line: "my friend." It's meant to be read fast- a person usually finds the right meter after a concerted go. It's meant to be an exhibition of everything that can be packed into that simple four word phrase: I do care, my friend.
These, however, are old. I haven't written anything substantial in about a year...
Thanks for your kind words :)