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Title: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Stealthgrrl on July 27, 2008, 08:26:10 AM
POEM OF THE SHADOW GIRL

When you speak to me,

I am like the leaf that gathers rainwater--

You are the bloom.



When you need me,

I am like the pillow someone lays her head upon--

You are the dream.



When you touch me,

I am like the cake someone steals some frosting from--

I exist for your desire.



When you are angry with me,

I am like the dented pail forgotten on the lawn--

I hold only emptiness.



And when you smile at me,

I am like a champagne geyser, I bubble and shine--

You are the midnight

You are the one I

Know can never be mine.
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Ell on August 11, 2008, 10:51:15 AM
Aw!
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Stealthgrrl on August 11, 2008, 11:50:42 AM
Yeah, one of scads of poems I've written for someone I love dearly.

Thanks for reading!

Stealth
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Sephirah on August 11, 2008, 11:59:25 AM
That is really beautiful.

You are an exceptional poet, Stealth.
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Stealthgrrl on August 11, 2008, 12:12:25 PM
Quote from: Leiandra on August 11, 2008, 11:59:25 AM
That is really beautiful.

You are an exceptional poet, Stealth.

Thank you for reading and for the kind words, Leiandra.  :) :) :)
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: NicholeW. on August 11, 2008, 01:18:14 PM
Stealth, you don't need kind words from anyone but editors of poetry journals!! You're poems are really excellent and should be collected in a book!

So many "poets" miss the intensity that lyric means. You get that.

Your poems are like perfect 17th century minatures worn as lockets: beautiful, powerful and such wonderful art. I would imagine people would be surprised how much you actually put into the writing to come out with the pieces you do.

Thank you.

Nichole
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Stealthgrrl on August 11, 2008, 03:40:43 PM
Quote from: Nichole on August 11, 2008, 01:18:14 PM
Stealth, you don't need kind words from anyone but editors of poetry journals!! You're poems are really excellent and should be collected in a book!

So many "poets" miss the intensity that lyric means. You get that.

Your poems are like perfect 17th century minatures worn as lockets: beautiful, powerful and such wonderful art. I would imagine people would be surprised how much you actually put into the writing to come out with the pieces you do.

Thank you.

Nichole

Hmm, they might indeed! I love your comparison to the miniatures. Lovely!

There once was a crone of the winter
and I aint got nuttin aginst 'er
she is so groovy
she should be a movie
then I'd go to Blockbuster and rint 'er

:) :) :) :P
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: je on August 11, 2008, 03:42:00 PM
Nice poem. I like it.
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: NicholeW. on August 11, 2008, 03:46:47 PM
Thanks, I think!!?  :laugh: :laugh: :laugh: :laugh: :laugh:

Never been the subject of a limerick before and have always thought the subjects of those were somewhat less-dignified than "Goddesses of Winter!"  >:D

What the hey, I like it anyhow. :)

Nichole
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Lisbeth on August 11, 2008, 05:33:28 PM
Your poem evokes so many sad memories for me.  It is indeed beautiful.

Lisbeth
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Stealthgrrl on August 11, 2008, 07:19:02 PM
Quote from: Ellie's Miss Lisbeff on August 11, 2008, 05:33:28 PM
Your poem evokes so many sad memories for me.  It is indeed beautiful.

Lisbeth

Thank you Ma'am.

and thank you Je.

I appreciate everyone who stopped to read and comment  :)

Stealth
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Lisbeth on August 12, 2008, 08:58:28 AM
Quote from: Stealthgrrl on August 11, 2008, 07:19:02 PM
Thank you Ma'am.

You are welcome, but you don't need to call me, "Ma'am."

*sigh* I'm not sure I like having a reputation as a Domme.  I am a switch, and as time goes on Ell's and my relationship has levelled a lot.  I think I'd rather just be plain old Lisbeth.
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Stealthgrrl on August 12, 2008, 09:04:01 AM
Quote from: Ellie's Lisbeff on August 12, 2008, 08:58:28 AM
Quote from: Stealthgrrl on August 11, 2008, 07:19:02 PM
Thank you Ma'am.

You are welcome, but you don't need to call me, "Ma'am."

*sigh* I'm not sure I like having a reputation as a Domme.  I am a switch, and as time goes on Ell's and my relationship has levelled a lot.  I think I'd rather just be plain old Lisbeth.

Lisbeth it is, then.  :)

(never encourage Stealth to drop her manners lol)

Stealth, painfully proper  :P
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: Lisbeth on August 12, 2008, 10:05:31 AM
Quote from: Stealthgrrl on August 12, 2008, 09:04:01 AM
Lisbeth it is, then.  :)

(never encourage Stealth to drop her manners lol)

Stealth, painfully proper  :P

Heh heh!  Don't worry; I'll only slap you down if you deserve it.  *wink*
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: NicholeW. on August 12, 2008, 10:38:24 AM
Quote from: Ellie's Lisbeff on August 12, 2008, 10:05:31 AM
Heh heh!  Don't worry; I'll only slap you down if you deserve it.  *wink*

Take that *wink* very seriously, Stealth. Our Ma'am Lizbeth only has eyes for the Elf these days!. She's in wuv. :laugh: And that is very grand! :)

Nichole
Title: Re: my poem "Poem of the Shadow Girl"
Post by: tinkerbell on October 18, 2008, 04:43:15 PM
That's so beautiful as well! Thanks very much for posting it! :)

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