Sounds very nice to me!

You've got the pitch and the softness down. I don't know if it was because you were nervous, but try enunciating just a tiny bit more, making sure you get the sound of every syllable. There were a few times your words all ran together and voice presentation can be enhanced by making sure each syllable is effortlessly clear as a bell.
Trust me... I have the same problem, so I shouldn't be one to talk.

My sinus issues make enunciation of some sounds extremely tough, even harder when I'm doing them in a higher register.