Wow.
I'm not really sure what I was expecting with those, but you did a great job managing to convey both tenderness and intensity. What interested me most was the internal emotional feelings Cailean dealt with and the struggle of wanting something even though you're not sure it's right. Head versus heart, as it were. You really gave the characters a third dimension and made it captivating to read. Although I must confess that the actual.. ahem... nitty-gritty of chapter three wasn't something which I would ordinarily read. Nevertheless, it was wonderfully written. You capture the seeming 'insanity of love' very well, how it makes you think and do things you would never have thought about. And the events in chapter four with Jake finding out who it was he actually has feelings for... well, I want to read more about that. It sounds like the makings of a 'tale of star-cross'd lovers' with a lot of twists and turns waiting in the wings.
I can't wait to read more. 🙂