I used to write poetry a lot, but it was almost always dark, with lots of hidden messages, that people didn't really seem to pick up on. But I wanted to write a poem for my wife for our anniversary, with a card and present of course. But since I made it all different than normal, I'm not sure if it's any good. Specially since I went very technical with it, which I don't really do. Let me know what you think, and is the message at least obvious.
Lightning Clouded Rain
I shall be the wind.
Nipping at your heels
Lifting you up to, the warmth of sunlight,
Calming your storm to, a gentle shower.
You shall be the star.
Guiding my eyes home
Wrapping around in, the air of moonlight,
Reviving the breeze, twisting in thunder.
We shall be the keys.
Finding the lost paths
Pushing through doors to, the hills of twilight.
Transending to lands, of dreams and wonder.
