Jessie Ann,
You are going WAY overboard with the makeup.  A key part of passing is not looking like a drag queen; it's unfortunate, but that's an image commonly associated with trans women.  Sometimes, less is more.  I tend to focus more on my contour than my eyes, and it does me a lot of good.  Remember, subtle is what's going to help you pass-not dramatics.  Drama is fun, but not practical.  You might want to consider not lining under your eyes so thickly.  Remember-subtle works.  It takes more time to learn, but once you figure out what works for you, passing will seem a lot more in reach.