Jessie Ann,
You are going WAY overboard with the makeup. A key part of passing is not looking like a drag queen; it's unfortunate, but that's an image commonly associated with trans women. Sometimes, less is more. I tend to focus more on my contour than my eyes, and it does me a lot of good. Remember, subtle is what's going to help you pass-not dramatics. Drama is fun, but not practical. You might want to consider not lining under your eyes so thickly. Remember-subtle works. It takes more time to learn, but once you figure out what works for you, passing will seem a lot more in reach.